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17th November 2013, 02:48 AM
Hey guys, I am writing a novel.
It will be called: King's Game.
It is about when an evil king that manipulates his kingdom in the form of a chess game, the kingdom with change forever. When a group of teens discover that they are being used, they embark on a journey to overthrow the king.
I just wanted you guys to see the prologue!
Here ya go!
"It's your move, sire," said the kings companion.
"I'm thinking, William!" said the king in a gruff tone. The king looked over his pieces thoughtfully.The pieces of chess resemble battle; eight pawns are the coating, and the other team has to slowly take them down, one by one, capturing the high sources of battle at the end, winning the game.
"Check," the king said, putting Williams king in danger. King Mitus leaned back into his throne and yawned, his stomach sticking out.
William immediately put his knight into a defending position.
"Aha!" King Mitus snatched Williams king, his civilization of pawns, bishops, knights, and so forth, collapsed.
"Check mate,"
William leaned back and smiled halfheartedly in defeat as the king grinned in victory.
"Sir...How do you do it? You beat me every time,"
"Because," Mitus started with a smirk, "I know what move you are going to make"
Do you guys like it? Anything i should add? (remember, it is only my first draft of the prologue)
Constructive criticism welcome! No mean comments!
Thanks,
~May23
It will be called: King's Game.
It is about when an evil king that manipulates his kingdom in the form of a chess game, the kingdom with change forever. When a group of teens discover that they are being used, they embark on a journey to overthrow the king.
I just wanted you guys to see the prologue!
Here ya go!
"It's your move, sire," said the kings companion.
"I'm thinking, William!" said the king in a gruff tone. The king looked over his pieces thoughtfully.The pieces of chess resemble battle; eight pawns are the coating, and the other team has to slowly take them down, one by one, capturing the high sources of battle at the end, winning the game.
"Check," the king said, putting Williams king in danger. King Mitus leaned back into his throne and yawned, his stomach sticking out.
William immediately put his knight into a defending position.
"Aha!" King Mitus snatched Williams king, his civilization of pawns, bishops, knights, and so forth, collapsed.
"Check mate,"
William leaned back and smiled halfheartedly in defeat as the king grinned in victory.
"Sir...How do you do it? You beat me every time,"
"Because," Mitus started with a smirk, "I know what move you are going to make"
Do you guys like it? Anything i should add? (remember, it is only my first draft of the prologue)
Constructive criticism welcome! No mean comments!
Thanks,
~May23
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17th November 2013, 04:07 AM
[quoteHey guys, I am writing a novel.
It will be called: King's Game.
It is about when an evil king that manipulates his kingdom in the form of a chess game, the kingdom with change forever. When a group of teens discover that they are being used, they embark on a journey to overthrow the king.
I just wanted you guys to see the prologue!
Here ya go!
"It's your move, sire," said the kings companion.
"I'm thinking, William!" said the king in a gruff tone. The king looked over his pieces thoughtfully.The pieces of chess resemble battle; eight pawns are the coating, and the other team has to slowly take them down, one by one, capturing the high sources of battle at the end, winning the game.
"Check," the king said, putting Williams king in danger. King Mitus leaned back into his throne and yawned, his stomach sticking out.
William immediately put his knight into a defending position.
"Aha!" King Mitus snatched Williams king, his civilization of pawns, bishops, knights, and so forth, collapsed.
"Check mate,"
William leaned back and smiled halfheartedly in defeat as the king grinned in victory.
"Sir...How do you do it? You beat me every time,"
"Because," Mitus started with a smirk, "I know what move you are going to make"
Do you guys like it? Anything i should add? (remember, it is only my first draft of the prologue)
Constructive criticism welcome! No mean comments!
Thanks,
~May23][/quote] Its Brilliant
It will be called: King's Game.
It is about when an evil king that manipulates his kingdom in the form of a chess game, the kingdom with change forever. When a group of teens discover that they are being used, they embark on a journey to overthrow the king.
I just wanted you guys to see the prologue!
Here ya go!
"It's your move, sire," said the kings companion.
"I'm thinking, William!" said the king in a gruff tone. The king looked over his pieces thoughtfully.The pieces of chess resemble battle; eight pawns are the coating, and the other team has to slowly take them down, one by one, capturing the high sources of battle at the end, winning the game.
"Check," the king said, putting Williams king in danger. King Mitus leaned back into his throne and yawned, his stomach sticking out.
William immediately put his knight into a defending position.
"Aha!" King Mitus snatched Williams king, his civilization of pawns, bishops, knights, and so forth, collapsed.
"Check mate,"
William leaned back and smiled halfheartedly in defeat as the king grinned in victory.
"Sir...How do you do it? You beat me every time,"
"Because," Mitus started with a smirk, "I know what move you are going to make"
Do you guys like it? Anything i should add? (remember, it is only my first draft of the prologue)
Constructive criticism welcome! No mean comments!
Thanks,
~May23][/quote] Its Brilliant
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